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A story about a dead woman by moppaa A story about a dead woman by moppaa
Sometimes takes me back to my memory
In the terrible summer day,
When wandered along the river nameless,
I stumbled on the corpse of the unfortunate woman.
She lay there, throwing back his head,
On the neck wound I saw the ugly.
From here it, barefoot, half-naked,
Some mud incomprehensible all smeared.
But that look bad, that hatred,
With a dead girl looked at me.
I exclaimed, meanings of his words not knowing:
"Don't you dare look me in everything she!"
't understand my condition,
Terrible glance eclipsed my mind,
And I ran away from the place.
Reduced crazy damn her eyes...

Ran until quite exhausted I,
But, I turned around and seen this little woman.
Can't be! What terrible power
Was the corpse suddenly set in motion?
And the body of the dead I pushed into the river fast,
And crossed it, the flow of подчиняемо.
And I'm going to run, that was my strength.
And fell on the road, shouting desperately...
And now I looked in the window, sleep-swollen -
Under the window - soaked corpse of the unfortunate woman!
Rubbed his eyes, and shadow is not disappeared!
Deliver us, Lord, to me those memories!
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Moppaa
"A story about a dead woman"
Mixed Media (Graphical/Poetry)
First impressions: Creepy, mysterious, watching me.
Critique:
The dark and desaturated nature of the graphic conveys a sense of disconnection from the world and a lack of life, reinforcing the isolation wrought throughout the poem.
The shadows conceal most of the figure, who exists primarily as a set of eyes. This emphasizes the mysterious nature of the dead woman, and her inhumanity via the distortion and corruption of those eyes.
The paranoia is enhanced by the focus on her eyes, showing her soullessness, and her steady gaze symbolizes the relentlessness of her pursuit.
Overall, I feel the artist intended to impart a feeling of disquietude and outright fear.
The course chosen to do this is not the most innovative, but the approach is rarer, and synchronizing the two forms of media is more complex than a single medium method.
It pays off with a greater emotional weight.
As a final note, whether or not it's intentional, the broken nature of the language delivers the prose with an intense rushed or panicked feeling that contributes to the piece.
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Like a glimpse into our larger reality, the true misery of the human condition, that includes pain and death. We want to escape from those toughts, we try to forget, but her eyes are there, screaming our horrible fate to us. Suddenly, we see that horrible vision, right in front of us. Such a vision makes us spin into another state of counsciousness, forcing us to dissociate from our futile wishes and preoccupations, trying to find the strenght to bear the truth about our ultimate destiny. Her disfigured face makes us wonder how she died, perhaps in a horrible way.
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Rhecht22 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2015  Student Artisan Crafter
Creepy, creepy, CREEPY!!!!!😱
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MWeiss-Art Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2014  Professional General Artist
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:iconassassinennoire:
Assassinennoire Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2014
Nicely done!
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:icondonnablack:
DonnaBlack Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
awesome work Applaud fella (Reactions) 
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:iconrosewolf86:
Rosewolf86 Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice work she is scary! 
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:iconcrystalsparklingstar:
crystalsparklingstar Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
When i thought Slenderman and Shion are SCARY....
:iconslenderplz: :iconshionlaugh:
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:iconvulzahkrii:
Vulzahkrii Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I really do not know how you are doing too scary images o_o
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:iconssjcybersonic:
SSJCyberSonic Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:icone-hplz:
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:iconmotherwolfsdawn:
MotherWolfsDawn Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh my god this is scary
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titia13 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2013  Student
as  an  amateur of  horror and gore  things i  admit that it is  very scary lol
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KabukiCakesArt Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
That is fricken awesome
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:iconfajralam:
Fajralam Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
its very terrifying :(
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:iconbeyblade-princess:
Beyblade-Princess Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Student Digital Artist
very scary ~~
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gratteloup Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013
It is an horrible thing i unfortunnatly can share with you...I used to work on the Garonne and Her riverside,i saw from far floating woods that weren't floating woods for the textures and colors and smelling can not fools you at all. and floating woods do not wears clothes.
  And last july,not so far from Bordeaux,there is a party every years who gather sailors and musicians,really great during about one week of sailing and three day of absolut party.
Will do it short. It was on the july 20 of this year,it was lunch time,and will always remember that i was drinking maté and eating strawberries on the riverside,alone, when the harassing heat make me want to swim,and the tide was going up.
  Before diving,becoz of an awful smelling,fortunatly i turned the head right,and saw a grey blue black huuuge floating corpse. i didn't puked.It was floating not so fast and changed of moving direction when knocking on trees roots or things in water,as easely as a ballon even if it was so so huuge.I took my stuff,clothes and begin to walk to civilisation to tell about,for peoples with child used to eat and play at the time.
  It was someone who disappear from the 10 of july from a city 30km above from the point i discovered it,or she,exactly.
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Odilicious Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Strange and disturbing!
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:iconwolf-rebel1:
wolf-rebel1 Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Student General Artist
(*0*) ... *Speechless*
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barnowlgurl23 Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Cool
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Blue-Midnight-Angel Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Stunning. Overly stunning. It is so realistic. I am almost speechless. 

Love the little "poem" at the end. It goes really well with the picture. 

Nicely done, Moppaa.   
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darkmasterblade Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
that looks like a wraith from stargate atlantis 0,..,0
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OinaruKiseki Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
That's something I don't want to see outside of my mirror any day. I feel this picture does capture that moment when she looks at you at that point. She's watching you...
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:iconwitchouse:
Witchouse Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
wow
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:iconejardkethot:
ejardkethot Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Student
damn nice!!
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flutterbrony16 Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome creepy 0.0
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mercurycode Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2013
Featured! fav.me/d6lzny4
Have a wonderful day :heart:
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:iconwaronicuke:
Waronicuke Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Creepy !Waaaah! Nuu 
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:iconhylian-witch:
hylian-witch Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Frightening! *shivers* Great work!
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:iconslipled:
slipled Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
creepy!!!
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LubnaQanber Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wooooo!!
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ValaSedai Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This work has been featured in
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RazielWesker Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2013
Awesome!
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E-D-Armstrong Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2013  Professional Writer
nice
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:icontamibe:
tamibe Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
amazing work :)
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MichaelaV Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2013  Professional Photographer
oh wow, I love it, so amazing and scary, exactly my style! 
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:iconsycen:
sycen Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
scary
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:iconskadoske:
Skadoske Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Great poem to a great photomanip. Creepy and awesome at the same time.
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:iconfelderanto:
Felderanto Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Nice! :)
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:icontoyona:
Toyona Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
wow, super freaky and the poem goes very well with it~
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KimranFarooq Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
almost made me jump. awesome work
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:iconmeioquilo:
meioQuilo Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013   Photographer
it looks very scary, very good!
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:iconaleraianprincess:
AleraianPrincess Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow, just wow. It's so spooky and realistic.
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BornFreak Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist
This is so awesome! :la:
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mikestevenson1955 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013
Worrying.
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almosthuman75 Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013
Love the eyes!!!! Fantastic!!! :-)
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Balthezor08 Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Student Photographer
Scary! Love it!
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:iconeckko:
Eckko Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013  Professional General Artist
So awesomely creepy!!!
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yansenwijaya Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
if i could not sleep tonight!i will blame you because of this!!
LOL
very creepy...but nice job..
brrr i am scared..
hug me!
Humpin that leg! Humpin that leg!
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c0rwyn Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013
creepy. I like. 
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:icondreamer-t:
Dreamer-T Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Love the eyes. :) Nice work. :aww:
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Haxixus Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That was awesome creepy.
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